5 Responses to Breach of Trust – Chapter 14

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   ALA on February 21, 2010 at 11:41 pm

   oooooo I’m a happy ALA

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   Lily on February 23, 2010 at 2:03 pm

   I read the entire thing and found it complex and dark. Elizabeth’s character could have been a little more developed.

   Overall, It was well executed.

   I hope that there is another chapter.

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     Remittance Girl on February 24, 2010 at 1:12 am

     Hmmm. Now that is interesting that you should say that. I’m trying hard to NOT do my usual thing of writing reams and reams on a character’s inner being because, quite honestly, this is more of a thriller and less of the sort of thing I usually do, but I’ll definitely take your point about her being too cardboardish to heart in the polish.

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   Ashes on March 9, 2010 at 6:34 am

   Wow up to chapter 15 & I still want to know Jack’s workings! He has a wife? How did he start on what he does?

   Elizabeth ended like I thought she would from the point that Jack slept with her… but that is because my mind is an odd scary place.

   Thank you very much for posting this!

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   Jessie on October 24, 2010 at 7:19 pm

   I think you ought to finish beautiful losers…. I’m hooked!!

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