Comments on: Breach of Trust – Chapter 14

By: Jessie

Jessie — Sun, 24 Oct 2010 12:19:39 +0000

I think you ought to finish beautiful losers…. I’m hooked!!

By: Ashes

Ashes — Mon, 08 Mar 2010 23:34:13 +0000

Wow up to chapter 15 & I still want to know Jack’s workings! He has a wife? How did he start on what he does?

Elizabeth ended like I thought she would from the point that Jack slept with her… but that is because my mind is an odd scary place.

Thank you very much for posting this!

By: Remittance Girl

Remittance Girl — Tue, 23 Feb 2010 18:12:46 +0000

Hmmm. Now that is interesting that you should say that. I’m trying hard to NOT do my usual thing of writing reams and reams on a character’s inner being because, quite honestly, this is more of a thriller and less of the sort of thing I usually do, but I’ll definitely take your point about her being too cardboardish to heart in the polish.

By: Lily

Lily — Tue, 23 Feb 2010 07:03:24 +0000

I read the entire thing and found it complex and dark. Elizabeth’s character could have been a little more developed.

Overall, It was well executed.

I hope that there is another chapter.

By: ALA

ALA — Sun, 21 Feb 2010 16:41:02 +0000

oooooo I’m a happy ALA