Comments on: The Challenge: Au Vanille et Chocolate http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/ Stories, Series, Novellas and Online erotica Sun, 19 May 2013 19:56:09 +0000 hourly 1 By: George Taylor http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/comment-page-1/#comment-20959 George Taylor Fri, 10 Aug 2012 06:58:32 +0000 http://remittancegirl.com/?p=4192#comment-20959 Vanilla and Chocolate:
“I shuffled up for the bottom of the bed, between his stretched out legs, on my knees, offering up my glistening hands. “Would I be wrong in thinking that I know what you’d like me to do with these?”” — for or from?

Vanilla:
“There was nothing in the world more erotic than watching the muscles of his stomach ripple as he arches.”
arched? to fit the past tense theme?

Chocolate:
“to watch my lap up the last of his semen.” — me or my?

I agree with Ashes, though I can’t say what’s bothering me. And thanks for pointing out the power dynamic in Vanilla, I enjoyed thinking about that.

]]> By: Ashes http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/comment-page-1/#comment-20867 Ashes Mon, 30 Jul 2012 04:25:08 +0000 http://remittancegirl.com/?p=4192#comment-20867 Funnily enough I preferred the vanilla one more. Still both great reads but the chocolate one just felt off to me somehow.

]]> By: Steven http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/comment-page-1/#comment-20624 Steven Sun, 17 Jun 2012 08:23:55 +0000 http://remittancegirl.com/?p=4192#comment-20624 “On second thought…” Yes, au chocolate is imo better. More personal… intimate, it grew in the second telling. If this is the same couple from “Mine” I heard an implied continuity and I like that. Thanks again, RG.

]]> By: Harper Eliot http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/comment-page-1/#comment-20251 Harper Eliot Sun, 29 Apr 2012 10:24:20 +0000 http://remittancegirl.com/?p=4192#comment-20251 Beautiful. What I really like about this challenge – and particularly your own take on it – is that it forces you to take very simple ideas and tweak them in really minute ways… As it turns out it doesn’t take much to make something vanilla kinky; but the little it does take makes all the difference. I’m going to try for this challenge over the next few days; time permitting.

]]> By: Monocle http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/comment-page-1/#comment-20186 Monocle Tue, 24 Apr 2012 03:58:12 +0000 http://remittancegirl.com/?p=4192#comment-20186 Fast writing exercises are always ‘I coulda done better’ territory. However, a) realizing that, and exactly how you could ahved done better means the exercise was successful, and b) I believe the point that even this speed writing is better than what is being offered in the mainstream by the fifty shades example is still amply made.

]]> By: Remittance Girl http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/comment-page-1/#comment-20184 Remittance Girl Tue, 24 Apr 2012 03:41:03 +0000 http://remittancegirl.com/?p=4192#comment-20184 No, I really don’t think so. The first still has a lot of power dynamics in it (subtle, but there, on her side). The second… meh, I could have done a better job in retrospect.

]]> By: Brantwijn Serrah http://remittancegirl.com/eroticshortstories/the-challenge-au-vanille-et-chocolate/comment-page-1/#comment-20183 Brantwijn Serrah Tue, 24 Apr 2012 03:36:37 +0000 http://remittancegirl.com/?p=4192#comment-20183 Definitely a winner!

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