Hole

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  1. Ken MIller
    January 6, 2010 at 11:37 pm

    The more I read what you write the deeper I see into the twists the turns. The more fascinating it becomes. Never an extra word used or wasted.

  2. January 7, 2010 at 1:16 am

    i love the detail of the “nondescript beige chair.” actually, your whole first paragraph captures the sterile essence of a hotel room quite well.

    this is a compelling story. i’m very intrigued by the narrator. why does she like this? when did she realize it?

    are you planning to write more?

    • Jimmy
      September 2, 2014 at 8:48 am

      Wow very exciting. I could feel it. The emotions in both characters. I didnt want it to end.

  3. Eve
    January 7, 2010 at 2:40 am

    I love this near balance between intimacy and isolation. Very exciting.

    Eve

  4. Liss
    January 7, 2010 at 9:16 am

    I’ve just been reading you for a few weeks and I felt obliged to comment finally and apologize for being a lurker. This was glorious!

  5. City Different
    January 7, 2010 at 12:15 pm

    Brilliant. The erotic is about desire, and desire is so much about separateness and striving for intimacy across boundaries that we can’t cross, don’t dare cross. You got it right here, Rgrl: “The sensation, no matter how sweet, how well meaning, was too much. Too tender. Too intimate. It was breaking her heart.” Yeah, it would kill her to kiss him. Brilliant.

  6. Nana
    January 7, 2010 at 8:14 pm

    I have nothing to add except: Brava!

  7. moltenthought
    January 8, 2010 at 12:28 am

    Full buy in – I feel uncomfortable with her requirement to remain so separate. It makes me long for that intimicy of touch for her.

  8. January 8, 2010 at 6:51 am

    Superb. Is she protecting herself or protecting him, I wonder?

  9. erOzica
    January 9, 2010 at 6:07 am

    You write..I feel. If that’s your intention with your readers, you succeed every time.

    • January 9, 2010 at 9:45 am

      WOw. Thank you!.

    • StarrGirl
      March 28, 2017 at 8:19 am

      This is totally accurate. Obviously you’ve heard that your stories are insanely hot, but for me that’s because I connect emotionally with your characters. It makes me want to write!

  10. Nancy
    January 9, 2010 at 11:23 am

    By the way, I loved this one too.

    I wanted so much for her to make love to him. I should likely say have sex with him, but I believe that some affection would make the contact more palpable, deeper, moving, and surely the orgasm would be stronger.

    I want to know why she has to keep her distance, what led him to agree to meet her with the limitations she had set. I want to know both of them better.

    As others have said, you do make us feel, and see, so much.

    Now, to bed to think of ‘others’.

    Bye.

    • January 10, 2010 at 12:14 am

      Hello Nancy, lovely to see you again. You wrote: “I want to know why she has to keep her distance, what led him to agree to meet her with the limitations she had set. I want to know both of them better.”

      Then I have done my job. What do you think makes people this way? What makes them so frightened to indulge in intimacy? What are they scared of losing?

  11. Johnnybegood
    January 9, 2010 at 5:41 pm

    I just wanted to tell you how much I love your fiction. How raw and unpretentious it is, how much truth you capture. It feels incredible to discover writing with a pulse, that is an adventure rather than an exercise. Thank you.

  12. Luke
    January 9, 2010 at 8:40 pm

    Lovely interplay of fantasy and reality; so very realistic in my experience. I also greatly enjoyed your description of her post-orgasmic state: your words paint a picture so much more powerful than an actual picture could ever achieve.

  13. Elise
    January 11, 2010 at 2:16 pm

    I was distracted by life but have started reading again today. As an aspiring writer I learn a lot from you. Thank you.

  14. max
    January 12, 2010 at 2:30 am

    love it. great tension.

  15. Holly
    January 13, 2010 at 11:03 am

    As always, you paint a picture for the mind. You never disappoint. Thanks.

  16. gg
    January 14, 2010 at 8:16 am

    Even formulating a concise response for this story is a challenge at the moment … This one packs a punch that i find incredibly sad.

    Someone touched on ‘her protecting him’ in one of the earlier comments – somehow that resonates. Perhaps she feels that sparing him the pain of losing her far out-weighs the pain of not truly knowing her to begin with. i don’t know, it’s just a thought, but i think she’s hiding something.

    This stirs up the emotional kettle for me, rg.

    Yet, as always – told with an expert and critical eye.

  17. mikaloff@gmail.com
    January 14, 2010 at 2:53 pm

    I’m one of those annoying vultures who has been reading your stories without commenting. I just don’t think I have anything to say that is interesting enough to follow what you’ve written. But, here goes…

    I think the reason your stories stay with me so long is all the things you don’t say. Why is she this way? Has something happened to her, or is it just the way she has always been put together? What happens next? Do they meet again online or in real life, or does she avoid him now that he has come too close?

    The bit with the chemicals fizzing in her veins at the end was a nice touch.

  18. S
    January 14, 2010 at 3:01 pm

    Sorry, would you mind changing the name on my previous post or deleting? There was a little spazzy clicking on my end.

  19. January 18, 2010 at 12:22 pm

    I haven’t read your work in a little while. It’s been accumulating in my RSS reader, awaiting some free time—and I’m glad to have found some finally. This was a great story with which to kick off my mini-marathon of erotica. If all the pieces I’ll be reading tonight are this good…well, it might be more than I can handle. It was an excellent piece, balancing wonderful writing with just the right amount of sex, perfect character development, and an intense rush from having to think so much about everything that was going on. I look forward to all that lies in store.

    ♥ Ash

  20. Ashes
    March 9, 2010 at 5:53 am

    So fantastically done.

    I am drawn in to wondering why “She tugged against the grip that held, then slipped, then held again, suddenly terrified” Most people don’t have that reaction unless they have been trapped & helpless before…

    Hmmm very nicely done as always you have drawn me in & made me want 😉

    Thank you!

  21. October 23, 2010 at 5:22 pm

    Kept me right here, enthralled, caught more tightly in your spell with each word, with each image you painted in my head. Lovely writing RG. Thank you.

  22. August 26, 2011 at 5:04 am

    Read this in “Too Much Boogie” a few days ago. One of my top 5 in the collection. The sexual tension and deprivation all in such a neat package. There so much told about the characters by what they don’t do.

  23. Sweet
    March 19, 2014 at 12:25 am

    Beautifully written. You have a way with words.

  24. iwikiwi
    March 19, 2014 at 4:11 pm

    Loved it. I could feel the tension present in the room

  25. Jake
    April 15, 2014 at 5:57 am

    I feel control is the emphasis of this piece. Very very interesting. How control and the struggle to maintain it is very interesting to me and maybe universally felt by many readers.

  26. Sweetcorruptor
    June 3, 2014 at 11:45 pm

    The control. The desire for her control. Delicious.

  27. Anastaria
    July 4, 2014 at 5:50 pm

    I hate her, i dont care what her reasons are but she torments both herself and him and it angers me to see the waste and pain she must cause him. Just shuck your panties and hop on damn it

  28. Margaux
    October 31, 2014 at 8:53 am

    Very good. Exciting and arousing and almost disappointing in the due to the great build of desire but then not quite. Facinating.

  29. Barb
    December 1, 2014 at 8:05 am

    I loved this. I felt line u was I. The room watching her watch him. Fabulous

  30. Ken
    May 25, 2015 at 11:27 pm

    the building excitement made me arch my back and thrust my hips up well written with mystery and anticipation

  31. Jake
    June 7, 2015 at 9:06 am

    The concise expression of control and desire and yet a fascinating cord between the two, impeccably raises the threshold for erotica.

    • June 7, 2015 at 9:09 am

      What a lovely compliment. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.

  32. Melane
    June 15, 2015 at 7:52 am

    I found your blog accidentally, browsing for something to kill loneliness with… I’ve come this far, it’s 3:43 before sunrise and I just can’t stop indulging into the feelings you provide.
    How wonderful it is, finding quality at its purest form and talent once in a blue moon. I truly, deeply thank you (and salute you, as an amateur author who just found a beacon to turn to) for that….
    Please don’t stop.

    The story? Simply amazing, meaningful and straight to the point; hollow we are (also frightened) and so we will remain unless we find the reason why (or maybe that’s what I see in her..)

  33. Chris
    July 22, 2015 at 4:34 am

    I like this kind of erotica. Not porn…mindful.

    • July 22, 2015 at 7:07 pm

      Thank you. I don’t have anything against porn. It can be very useful, and effective :P, but you’re right; it’s not what I write.

  34. chris mooney
    November 10, 2015 at 3:56 am

    Just started reading some of your stories to gain some inspiration for parts of a book i’m putting together.Maybe i can pick your brains for ideas and i’ll pass some over to you if thats ok…..!!chris

  35. December 3, 2015 at 1:58 am

    Very enjoyable and completely convincing. When I finished reading I felt like I had stepped out of the room as well.
    The enormity of the withheld… so potent.

  36. nigel parker
    January 7, 2016 at 8:17 pm

    thank you,it reminded me of a lovely married lady I knew,she didn’t want to have full sex but just to kiss then we would masturbate while the other watched.a well written story.

  37. becki
    January 8, 2016 at 5:13 pm

    I loved this. So many questions. Did they meet online? Do they really know each other? Why won’t she touch or be touched? What happens after she leaves the room?
    I’d love to be able to write like this

  38. Zerolr
    February 2, 2016 at 4:26 am

    Wow this was amazing.

  39. April 10, 2016 at 3:46 pm

    Wonderful. I loved the way you wove the anxiety and lust together to create the tension.

    • April 15, 2016 at 10:50 am

      Isn’t there always anxiety simmering beneath lust? 😛

  40. Darryl
    July 15, 2016 at 10:35 am

    Wow! Such detailed word pictures! I felt the excruciating need in them both as well as there mutual domination.
    She went home and sharing with her real lover they fucked each other silly!
    Excellent!!

  41. Reed
    July 31, 2017 at 6:28 am

    RG, you should check out a novel called Hallam Foe by Peter Jinks. It deals with voyeurism in its most basic and raw form and all the consequences that come from it. It’s not erotica but your writing reminds me of it in a way and I think you would find it fascinating.

  42. Leonie Peerboom
    October 19, 2017 at 7:41 pm

    That was amazing. This was my first read but I am sure I will be back for more

  43. October 26, 2017 at 10:14 am

    An interesting premise, well written. You have a genuine knack for delicious verbiage. This is the first story of yours I’ve read, and as an erotic story writer myself, I am quite impressed! I’ll have to read some more. Thanks!

  44. Stephen
    December 14, 2017 at 1:34 am

    Beautifully done. I really enjoyed it. Your description of what he was feeling was so accurate that I felt what he felt. I’ve done this with a woman I’ve never met and it is good. Congratulations.

  45. KevinF
    December 30, 2017 at 2:50 am

    You’re really very good at this type of writing. As I read this story I got very close to the edge myself.
    Thankfully he came before I did! Lol!

  46. Jill
    January 10, 2018 at 2:06 pm

    My heart is racing. Holy fuck.

  47. Bill
    January 29, 2018 at 9:28 pm

    She gets hot, but she resists, then walks away. A wasted moment. Can a woman do that? Terribly frustrating for her. i don’t think a man would, had the roles been switched.

    • January 29, 2018 at 10:28 pm

      I think it depends on the man. My intention in leaving it this was was to make you wonder why.

  48. Nissarious Drasson
    March 16, 2018 at 7:01 am

    your writing is so captivating!

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