26 comments for “Tourist – Part 1

  1. March 12, 2013 at 4:59 pm

    Nothing constructive to say, other than, brilliant.

    • March 12, 2013 at 5:07 pm

      Thanks for taking the time to read, Mina. Just knowing you are reading is really constructive for me. 😀

      • Anastaria
        July 4, 2014 at 8:13 am

        In Bequeathed, did you name Mina after this friend of yours? Is she lonely?

  2. March 26, 2013 at 5:26 am

    Lovely, as always.

  3. A F Hand
    April 30, 2013 at 3:23 pm

    Brilliant, evocative, stunning…

  4. orange rose
    March 15, 2014 at 10:39 pm

    Made me want to go home with Marcus.

  5. Luna
    May 30, 2014 at 8:50 am

    The anticipation builds ever so nicely towards the end…Marcus….

  6. Sarah
    June 25, 2014 at 5:12 am

    Very detailed & therefore very intense to read. Going to dash off to read part 2 (and the rest) right now.

  7. Tanja
    November 8, 2014 at 10:17 am

    Different. Not quite as erotic as I was expecting. Interested to see how the other parts are.

    • July 13, 2018 at 1:17 pm

      I defff agree, I had to go back to see if I missed something but I will see how it ends it still good regardless

  8. valerie
    November 29, 2014 at 12:41 am

    delicious and different 🙂

  9. JudyLee
    January 4, 2016 at 7:17 pm

    An observation from a pain sub as she became Dominant for a brief moment. Not entirely, though. In the back of her mind she was revelling in her own upcoming punishment. A well written story from an unusual perspective. Judy

  10. Minnower
    May 28, 2016 at 10:51 pm

    Pt 1: I’m returning to Part 1 to ask if I missed something. What does this have to do with Parts 2, 3 and 4? The characters here, geography, tone and style are not the same. This was OK but I do wish Sandy and the mistress would now dump Marcus, a creep, at least for a while. The possibilities are many but only one way exists to Pt 2–where one or both women end up tricked by the Snake? Maybe Sandy is his agent like the Venus Fly Trap pictured at the bottom of this web page (I have a source of such tales via the economic underground she is forced to inhabit; perhaps you do too). I have a Pt 2 comment at the end of Part 4. I love your writing ability by the way.

    • May 29, 2016 at 3:37 pm

      Then I’m passing you the baton to write this story onwards! Go to it!

  11. Minnower
    May 30, 2016 at 6:54 am

    OK, I’m on it.

  12. Yasmine
    May 30, 2016 at 8:01 am

    Wonderful story telling. I’m hooked. You’re gifted. Thank you

  13. Paul
    June 18, 2016 at 5:12 am

    I write too.
    And this is one genre I’m exploring.
    So it was a pleasure to read something more advanced.
    It appeals to all the senses.
    And you have a lovely turn of phrase.
    The post modern is evident and subtly employed.

  14. Angelika
    August 12, 2016 at 6:36 am

    Just a spelling/word correction here.

    Feint means a deception, a mock blow. You feint with your left fist & knock him out with your right fist.

    Faint means barely perceptible. The faint red mark was left by the crop.

    • August 18, 2016 at 10:23 pm

      thank you. I do, of course, know the difference between feint and faint. Damn MS word and typos.

  15. k
    April 19, 2017 at 1:44 am

    Love the way you leave little gaps to start off. Make me want to read more and discover more about the story.

  16. Mr. L
    August 28, 2017 at 11:34 am

    This was very interesting.

  17. Tye
    October 25, 2017 at 8:51 am

    Very interesting. I notice that most comments here are made by women. What is the view on male subs?

    • October 26, 2017 at 8:21 am

      Again, not really understanding your question. Whose view? Can there be a universal ‘view’ on male subs? They exist.

  18. Terry Loske
    November 19, 2017 at 12:17 pm

    Connects with your senses, caused me to catch my breath and yearn to read more

  19. Rob
    December 6, 2017 at 11:07 pm

    I enjoy reading BDSM because the pain and pleasure combination can be overwhelming. Nice to have a watcher too! Very good overall.

  20. Henry
    February 5, 2018 at 11:53 pm

    Little Typo “Am I am monster?” should be “Am I a monster?”

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