On A Very Dry Afternoon in Early Summer

Trigger Warning: This story explores the subject of consensual non-consent, memory, and rape. It is meant to be disturbing, but not exploitative. Please exercise your good sense. Do not read it if you feel this sort of subject matter would affect you adversely.


It was easy to want her, to picture himself pinning her with the weight of his body, feeling her struggle beneath him, spreading her unwilling thighs, forcing his cock into her, trespassing where she no longer wanted him and not caring that she didn’t. Delighting in the fact that he gave her no choice. That part was easy.

All it took was imagining her betrayal; the casual, quotidian butchery people did to each other all the time. No matter how open he’d made himself to her, or how much she’d shown herself to him, or how he’d forced himself to trust her, to risk letting her all the way in, all it took was a change of her heart. Someone she cared for more than she cared for him. She could do it.

This was the acid he poured onto his hesitation.

It was just as easy to imagine ways to hurt her.  Words and acts that would wound her, frighten her, make her feel like she was nothing. Make her regret even contemplating the act of destroying him.

She’d cry and she’d beg and she’d try to reason with him, but he could shut his ears to all that. After all, wasn’t this the same woman, the same voice that promised to love him forever? The one who swore she’d always belong to him? All the shit lovers told each other when they were coming and regretted once they’d showered?

All this was what he used as fuel for his intentions. As the clock ticked down to the zero hour, he revisited this part of himself  –  the cynic, the bitter, misused monster he kept in the closet.

The hard part was having any confidence that he could translate fantasy into fact.  In his fantasy, she was a shell. She looked the same, sounded the same, felt the same, but somehow it was all attenuated.  It would be different, he was sure, in the flesh.

Harder still was convincing himself that she would ever forgive him, no matter how many assurances she gave him. How could she know herself that well? How could anyone? If he was to be honest with himself and step into her shoes, he could not say with certainly that he could do the same.

But the hardest part of all was believing that he would deserve to be forgiven.


“What percentage of men fantasize about raping a woman?” I had asked.

“Men who rape, or just fantasize about it? There’s a big difference.”

“Men who just fantasize about it.”

He was silent as he thought. “I don’t have a clue. More than anyone’s comfortable admitting, I’d guess.”

“Wild guess?”

He looked up from his desk and shrugged. “I really don’t know.”

“Do you fantasize about it?”

“That’s not a fair question.”

I pulled out the chair in front of his desk and sat down. “Why? Because someone raped me?”

“Well, yes. That, and you’re asking in the specific. Do you really want to know the answer?”  He moved a neat pile of papers from one side of his desk to the other, uselessly, to do something. “Don’t set a trap for me.”

I pulled up my knees, wrapped my arms around them, and rested my chin. “It’s not a trap. I swear.”

“Really want an answer? Think. Please, think fucking carefully.”

I did think –  a long time. Then I came around his desk, slid into his lap and leaned my head on his shoulder.  “I do want to know. Although your reluctance is pretty damn eloquent.”

“Then you’ve got your answer.”

I had my answer. And I felt him loosen his arms, as if waiting for me to get up and leave, but I didn’t.

“It’s what I keep the tightest leash on. I’d never do it. But I’ve fantasized about it,” he offered.


“Not often, but when I do, it’s hot.”

“Why’s it so hot?”

He jostled me as he shrugged again. “Because it’s so wrong.”

“Is she some abstract woman or someone you know?”

“Either. Both. Depends on my mood.”

I turned in his lap and eyed him. “Me?” He met my gaze but said nothing. “Don’t tell me what you think I want to hear.”

He gave me a pained, irritated look and pulled me back against him, but it was gentle, tentative. “Why are you asking this?”

I thought about trying to explain and knew it would make no sense to him. It hardly made sense to me. “Please, just tell me.”

He stroked my hair off my forehead. Something I’d only ever seen parents do to children. “Yes.”

“Is it violent?”

“A little. Sometimes. Sometimes it’s not.”

“Do you kill me?”

“What the fuck?” He stiffened, pulled back and stared at me. “Jesus, no.”

“Sorry. I just…” I grinned, embarrassed. “I fantasize about all sorts of awful stuff. I assumed everyone does.”

Brows furrowed, he looked at me as if I were a disappointingly slow child. “You wouldn’t be nearly as much fun dead.”

It was an attempt to turn the conversation, to get me to say something silly back. I considered a quip about zombie sex, but resolved to stick my course.  “Do I fight?”

He did his best to keep a straight face, but the smile won. “Oh yeah. You fight. You fight hard.”


People describe memory as one long, detailed film, but it’s nothing like that. Sometimes it’s a fairy tale you tell yourself just to knock the past into some kind of shape that will fit in a box so you can store it away. Sometimes, it’s as if you’re telling the story of someone else: an earlier version of you, almost unrecognizable now; a stranger with your face and your name, but alien and broken. Mostly, it’s just a series of tiny moving clips, with sound and colour and smell and feeling. With chunks missing in between, as if someone forgot to hit the record button.

We were sitting at the bottom of the garden at my house, on a very dry afternoon in early summer, just before school let out. I had bruises on my shins from field hockey and was ashamed of them. The faded purples and blues marked the skin of my shins, and was worried that he’d see them too and think them ugly.

He was so handsome, I kept telling myself to look ahead, look ahead over the terrace wall to the burned bristle of the slopes beyond, so he wouldn’t catch me staring.  I felt so lucky. Lucky that he’d noticed me. Lucky that he’d talked to me. Lucky that he’d held my hand and kissed me in the hallway at school. Lucky that he’d offered me a ride home on his bike.

We sat on the stone garden wall, looking down the hillside, drinking iced tea I’d made myself because my parents were out and I wanted to impress him, until he finished his and reached for my hand. None of the boys I’d known had been confident the way he was. On the way home, with the hot, dry, salty air streaming through my hair, he’d reached back and pulled my arm around his waist. And this gesture was just like that one. As if all the limbs in the world belonged to him.

Then we were kissing beside the pool on a pile of faded blue lounger cushions covered in dry eucalyptus leaves, breaking up and prickling under my shoulders and my thighs. He was on top of me, his hips pressing into mine, kneeing my legs apart and it hurt. Like his fingers digging into the nothing swell of my non-existent breast. That’s when he kept on kissing me, after I’d stopped. I could smell his spit on my mouth, and his ragged breaths.

He was hurting me, pressing the air out of me, bruising my bony hips with his, yanking the hem of my dress up my body.  I didn’t feel lucky anymore. And he had ceased to be handsome.

“No. Stop that. It hurts.”

“Don’t be stupid. You’ll like it.”

I was crying and trying to push him off, or squirm out from under him. Both at the same time.  He was laughing and pushing my legs open with his hand, his fingers in my crotch, nails scratching me as he tried to pull my panties out of the way.  The cotton stretched and burned my skin.

I remember sobbing, saying, “I thought you liked me,” and knowing then how pathetically immature it sounded, and that he had never liked me. He’d just pretended so he could hurt me, like this.

That –  the dreadful sense of my own stupidity,  the recognition of my inane hopefulness –  that’s what broke me. That’s when I stopped fighting.

I don’t remember how he got his cock inside me.  As if some all-powerful deity edited that bit out. All I remember is that I turned my head and looked at the long leaves, like curved, silvery daggers, floating on the surface of the pool’s blue water, and thinking this hurts. It shouldn’t hurt like this. I remember my fisted hands aching.  I remember he finished and pulled out of me and tugged my dress down over my hips.

Now all I want to know is that I could not be broken with such appalling ease. I want to know that I would find myself of greater worth.  I want to know I’d fight.


Two weeks later, she brought it up at dinner. “Remember what we talked about a while ago? About rape?”

Christ, not this again. What was going on with her? He swallowed and put his fork down carefully. “Fantasy. Rape fantasy.”


He leaned his elbows on the table, interlaced his fingers, and propped his chin on them. In the years they’d been together, they’d had all sorts of conversations and all sorts of sex. She wasn’t inhibited or unadventurous. There were times when she wanted it rough and he’d been happy to oblige. Then she went through phases of almost unworldly tenderness. He’d always been fairly open about what turned him on, but he knew about her past. And, with that in mind, he’d stayed well away from anything that even hinted at non-consent. He had no idea how to handle her fixation on this particular subject, and it felt like a set up. Like she was looking for something to be upset about. “And you’ve decided I’m a psychopath?”

“You’re not a psychopath,” she said dismissively.

“How do you know?”

“Psychopaths don’t have ethics or empathy.”

“They’re pretty good at faking it, though.”

“So are a lot of politicians.  Are they all psychopaths?”

“Possibly,” he said, but he smiled and felt his shoulders unlock. “Look, the fantasies are fantasies. I’m not particularly proud of them, but you asked and I answered truthfully.  And you… well, you’ve got some personal history there, so I get that it’s a minefield for you. But everyone has fantasies they’d never act on and…”  He stopped, tasting his own defensiveness. “Wait a minute. Why are you bringing this up again?”

She prodded the fish on her plate with her fork, took a sip of wine and swallowed. “I need to know that I’d fight if I got raped again.”

“Are you expecting that to happen anytime soon?” An irrational anger tightened his chest.

“No. But it could. I just want to know. That’s all.”

“You would fight. Take my word for it.”

“I wish I could. But I can’t.  I didn’t. You know? I didn’t and, well, it’s bothered me for a long time. He could have done anything. He could have killed me and I would have just let it happen.”

He fought down the hair-trigger rage that flamed up whenever he was forced to confront the fact that some prick had done this to her.  He forced himself to speak calmly. “You were young. And frightened. And traumatized.”

She shook her head. “No. You don’t understand. Maybe you can’t. Maybe men just can’t.”

“Don’t…” he almost lost it.  This ‘men don’t understand shit’ made him livid. Women didn’t understand either. She had no idea how badly he wanted, if it were remotely possible, to track the cocksucking asswipe down and beat him to death with a blunt object. He took another deep breath, reached for the bottle of wine and refilled her glass. “Look, I’m certainly not going to understand if you don’t explain it.”

“Oh, and this is lubricant?” she said, taking another swig.

He inclined his head and shrugged. “It can’t hurt.”


“No, wait.” Standing up, he grabbed the wine, and held out his hand. “Come sit with me.”

Nestled up next to him on the sofa, he wrapped an arm around her small shoulders, and resolved to listen without losing his temper. “Now, explain it.”

“It’s not the rape. It’s not really about what he did to me anymore. It hasn’t been for a long, long time.”


“It’s about what I didn’t do. That’s what eats away at me. It does. You have no idea how it does. Every time I think I’m strong, that I won’t take shit, that I take the measure of myself, it comes back to haunt me. It’s robbing me of something important.”

“So, what can I do?”

“I want to know that I’m not that person now,” she muttered.

“Wait a minute.” He moved and cupped her chin in his hand, forcing her to face him. “What are you asking me?”

He noticed then that she hadn’t been sleeping. There were faintly bruised half moons beneath her eyes.  Maybe she was about to cry.  She didn’t do it often, but when she did, it distracted him. Part of him felt her pain and the other part licked his lips.  She thought this was all about her, but it wasn’t. And, if he were honest, he knew what she wanted. It just scared the fuck out of him.

“Ah, you can’t say it can you?” he asked.


“Because if you say it, then that changes everything, doesn’t it? Then…” he pursed his lips and nodded. “If you ask me to, then it’s not rape.”


Her mistake, although he wasn’t going to tell her, was sophistry. Consent was more and less than words. She was trying to find logic to fit her needs.  This was a game of words, and she’d realize it soon enough. But it was a selfish game.

“Assuming what you are not asking was even possible, has it occurred to you that this might affect me?”

She had the grace to look like the floor had dropped out from under her. She pulled her chin from his grasp and leaned her forehead his shoulder.  “Oh.”

“Yeah, I thought so.” He gave her a while to think that one through.

“I’m sorry,” she said.

“Accepted.  But just to be crystal clear: what happens if I do? If I agree to go down this road with you, if I do what you won’t ask me to do, what will that make me? How real is real? Where’s the safe word? Where are your limits? Where the fuck are mine?” He could feel the anger, the unfairness of the situation gnaw at his innards. Breathing deep, he went on: “Because, honestly, I have no idea. What if I can’t stand what I find out about myself while you’re busy finding how empowered you are?”

She groaned against his shirt. “Jesus, okay. Forget it.”

What he couldn’t find a way to tell her was that she’d unwittingly stuck her finger into a huge, festering wound. Part of him did indeed want to know just how cruel he had the capacity to be, where he would draw the line and whether what he fantasized about would exile him, irredeemably, from his own sense of humanity.  But he’d lived with that puzzle for years. He’d settled into a bearable truce with his uglier urges. There were things you just didn’t bring into the light. And answers you could forgo. For all his darkness, one doubt burned. Not as containable as any of others.

“Here’s what worries me most: after you’ve found out what a courageous, fighting, spitting, biting little firebrand you are, after you put up a brave but ultimately useless defense, because – make no mistake – no matter how hard you fight me I will have you, how are we going to find our way back from that?”

For a long time, she didn’t answer him.  Finally, she pulled herself apart from him and sat forward, nodding as if she’d settled on something in her own mind. ” And those things, they’re all things you’d rather not know.”

“I didn’t say that.”


Torn between fear and determination, her glances are furtive, hyper-vigilant. Her control slips. Her smile fails as the muscles draw it out in uneven little jerks. It’s a stuttered petition of a smile. A slightly manic, are-we-really-going-to-jump-off-this-cliff smile.

It’s so easy to see her mind’s gears churning, gripping, catching, and slipping. Her pulse is a moth trapped beneath the skin under her jaw, caged in taut tendon. But she’s here, despite her misgivings.  And jumping off this particular cliff was more her idea as his.

“It’s today, right?” she asks.

“Yes. Today.”

“Has it started yet?”

“Not yet.” He lies, watching the tension leave her posture.

In a way, it started the moment she began to talk about it.  The moment he understood exactly what she was asking.  He’s been chewing on time for days.

She wants it neat and clean. The uncertainty disorients her, refuses her a sense of order, a notion of what to expect and how to plan for it. This is a part of her she rarely shows: her equilibrium askew, her capacity to analyze and rationalize – so much a part of how she makes sense of the world – temporarily disabled.

They have agreed to suspend disbelief and enter into a fiction. They’ve given each other formal assurances of unconditional forgiveness. But he can’t, for all her promises, truly trust her. In a way, that’s part of the thrill – the not being sure. The risk of everything they have. If it blows up, it will blow up big.

“Then I’m going to sit down outside and do a bit of editing.”

“You do that. I’ve got some things to finish up here.”

With the tips of her fingers, she combs through the hair at his temple and kisses his forehead.  Her skin gives off the scent of the soap she uses. He allows the gesture – that familiar act of affection – to curdle into patronizing condescension. He takes umbrage and it tastes sharp and sweet.

Still, he forces himself to respond as he always does, with a playful slap on her ass.  Perhaps not quite as gentle as usual but, if she feels the sting of it, she doesn’t let on.

He swivels his study chair to watch her pace back down the shadowed hallway on bare feet.  Her shoulder blades tenting the white ribbed tank top, her dark grey jogging pants loose on her hips, her hair plaited into a careless braid.  It sways, a counterpoint.

“Whore.” He forms the word without speaking it.

He’s not going to give her the comfort of choosing the time or the place. Nor the dignity of what state she’s in when he takes her. He’s going to rob her of all of that and more.


The day promises to be hot, but the air still holds the cool tang of earlier, verdant shadows. As hard as I try to concentrate on the manuscript in front of me, the words squirm and slip like flatworms in silt. I make inane notations, cross them out, rewrite, recross them, and glance up at the house for the fifth time.

There are questions I haven’t had the courage to ask him for dread of the answers.  For fear he will read me too well and give me the answers he believes I want. There is a continuum of cruelty, from the petty to the murderous. I don’t know his limits. Or my own.

Everyone has ghosts. He has many. I only a few, but they are debilitating things. They gnaw at the stuff I think I’m made of. They despoil all the triumph of my dreams and poison my victories.

Fear fascinates me like a cobra fascinates its prey.  Once terror locked me, turned me into an absence. Like Lot’s Wife, into a pillar of salt.  And for years, each time I have glanced over the shoulder of memory, it did the same. Where had the animal inside me gone? The instinct to protect myself evaporated in a moment. My ability to think with clarity, to understand what was unfolding, to strategize, all gone. Even the most basic impulse to push, to bite, to kick, to fight, to curse deserted me.  I’d been a victim and, ever since, I’ve lived with the specter that I could be one again, in the blink of an eye.

I’ve spent my life seeking out fear before it found me.  Down dark alleys, in the bad parts of town, in cholera camps and street riots and the close, sweat-scented bedrooms of strangers. In the harness of a parachute and at the end of a bungee cord. Whatever it was, if it scared me, I fought down the urge to run, set my jaw and walked straight towards it.  Sometimes stupidly, sometimes with calculated appraisal of the risks, I walked into the arms of lovers who would press the edge of a blade to my cheek, who would tie me down and display their instruments of pain, and then use them on me.

Perhaps because of all that, I never again ran into a man who breached the boundaries I laid down. Never stumbled across anyone who did not screech to a dead halt at the utterance of the word no.

I glance up at the house again; the windows of his study are open. There’s music coming from them. Something I don’t recognize.

Although he has never crossed my lines, he pushed at them in as many ways as there were opportunities. He’s cajoled, persuaded and manipulated me right to the edge of them. Maybe on him I smelled the capacity to hear the word and not to heed it.  Maybe that’s why I chose him, and why I have stayed.


The sharp tug on my braid snaps my neck back. My hands, soapy from the water in the sink, grasp, scrabble and slip at the edge of the counter. The floor is damp in places and my bare feet slide on the tiles.

The forearm that bars my neck seems thicker than his. It cuts off my cry midstream and pulls me back against his body. The force of it almost lifts me off the ground. I try to prise his arm away but only end up scratching at the skin of my own neck. Had I been firmly on my feet, I could connect my heel to his shin, but I’ve got no balance, no leverage, and I hit nothing.  It feels just like before, even if it’s entirely different. I’m a doll. I’m dumb, helpless meat.

“Come on,” he says, moving his arm off my windpipe, until the air I don’t even realize I’ve been trying to gulp down enters my lungs. “Say it.”

Say what? The words don’t register. What is it he wants me to say?  But I know. Of course, I know. Fingers dig into the hollows at my cheeks, squeezing until the pain brings tears to my eyes.  “Say it and let’s get to it.”

“No.” The word’s just a whisper but it doesn’t matter. There, I’ve said it.


“No!” I say louder, trying to shake my head loose of the awful pressure.

“Once more, just for the record.”


He releases my jaw, only to plant a stinging slap on the side of my cheek. “That’s my girl.”

The slap isn’t hard, but it staggers me. I want to turn around and tell him that it wasn’t like this at all, that I need to explain how it was so he’ll understand.  But he’s lowers me back onto my feet and, before I have a chance, he’s got my hair again, right by the roots, and he’s dragging me through the kitchen and down the hall. I have to stumble-run to keep up, to stop him from pulling it out.

Pure fear. Bright, white, blinding, muscle priming fear. This is a familiar feeling. I know how to ride this.

Bracing for the pull and the pain, feet wide apart, hands flat to the wall, I stop. Even so, it takes him a pace or two to notice. He rears on me, and I can hardly recognize him. The anger I’m expecting to see isn’t there. Instead, it’s disdain – cold and hard and something else – perhaps contempt.

“You want it here?” he says, planting a palm on my chest and slamming me to the wall with a single hard shove. Taller than me by almost a foot, I crane my neck to look at him. He smirks. “Think I’m going to let you dictate anything to me? Think you can just turn me on and off with a switch? Who the fuck do you think I am?”

With careful deliberation, I edge my hands between our chests and shove hard with all my might, but the angle’s not good. I can’t put any muscle into it. He doesn’t budge an inch.

“Jesus Christ. That’s pathetic. That’s so fucking pathetic it’s almost endearing.”

“Fuck you,” I say, bringing up my knee between his legs. But he twists and it doesn’t connect with his balls. He just grunts as I hit his thigh.

“That… is not endearing. And now you’ve pissed me off.” His hand closes around my upper arm so tight I hiss. “Either you’re going to move or I’m going to move you. That much is up to you. The rest is not.”

But I’m not really listening now. I swing at his face with my one free hand. And miss.

“Fuck it,” he mutters, slapping my fist away. He stoops, grabs me around the waist with one arm, and hefts me onto his shoulder.

“Motherfucker.” It comes out as a wheeze, because I’m upside down and can’t breathe properly with his shoulder in my gut. I feel the blood draining into my face, the jolt of every step he takes. And, inanely, notice a worn patch on the back pocket of his jeans.

“Please, put me down,” I croak.

“Please put me down,” he echoes back in a falsetto.

Even as I try to kick my legs I know how cartoonish it looks. He’s got one arm around my thighs and the kicks do nothing.

“Really, I mean it. I can’t breathe. Put me the fuck down.”

“Really, I mean it. I really, really mean it!” He uses a ridiculous, high-pitched whine as sarcasm.

The fear has ebbed and anger has replaced it.  I can tell he’s got no destination in mind; he’s carrying me around like this because he knows I’ll hate it. Balling my fist, I take careful aim, and slam it down as hard as my position will allow, on his left kidney. There is no immediate reaction. Then he gasps and for a moment, I think he’s going to drop me.

“You fucking cunt.”


As the pain lanced through him, he thought he might drop her.  But he breathed into the pain and felt it ebb. Fuck this shit. He needed to get her off his back and onto hers. Just as he felt her move on his shoulder to take another swing at him, he flipped her off him, and slammed her down on their bed.

He hadn’t intended to use the bedroom. Something in the back of his mind warned him to do it elsewhere, to leave that particular room untainted by this. Fuck it. She wanted to play? He’d play. He’d play just as hard and mean as she wanted. Harder, meaner. And then she’d know what it meant to see everything crash and burn.

The adrenalin streamed through his veins, cut through his muscles like blades, hum in his chest. He straddled her thighs and caught her flailing arms by the wrists. First one, then the other, and pulled them to her chest. She had little bones, little wrists. They fit so perfectly in one hand as he held them down between her breasts.

Her face had been red, but the colour was draining from it now. She was talking to him, swearing at him, bucking her hips beneath him, but all of that was just so much noise. He was looking at the tears at the corners of her eyes, just threatening to spill, the tight tendons on her slender neck, the swell and jiggle of her breasts as she took another breath to fire more invective at him.  He was looking at one perfect, rounded curve of her shoulder.  Then down at where her shirt had worked its way up one side of her torso. The exposed skin unmarked and bare, soft there, in the shallow valley between her hipbone and the swell of her belly. Through all the noise, the screeching and jostling and kicking and crying, that’s all he wanted. That place. To sink his teeth into it and never unlock his jaw again.

His skin. His, no matter what she said, no matter how she felt. His skin and he would push inside it and own it. He would teach her that it belonged to him; that her mouth and her eyes and her tears and her voice and her hands and her cunt and every fucking breath she took was his.

His cock throbbed.  His balls tightened.  As if all he had to do to own the whole fucking world was to push through the maddening, crooked, ugly veil of it, groin first. And there would be rest for his soul on the other side. But first, he had to get there.

“I hate it when you wear pants. Skirts are so much easier. You wear this shit just to piss me off.”


It would be so easy to give in, to go limp and pliant and get it over with. I look up at him, and wonder why I’m doing this? I love him. I want him more than any other man alive. How could I ever have imagined he could be a stranger to me? What is all this pretending going to prove? That he can wear a mask? That I can convince myself, for five minutes, that I don’t want to have sex with him?

When he hooks the fingers of his free hand into the waistband of my track pants, and starts tugging them down, I have to stop myself from raising my hips. Looking down his body to his crotch, I can see he’s hard. The bulge of his cock is straining at his jeans. I can’t help myself, I smile.

He stops trying to work my pants down and backhands me so hard that, for a moment, my vision goes dark. Then the phosphenes invade it and sparkles interrupt the lines of everything I can see. It’s not the pain I feel first, it’s the taste of metal in my mouth. Blood from where my teeth have cut into my cheek.

“Fuck.” It’s all I can get out, because my throat has closed up and I have to work to take a breath.

“Don’t you fucking look at me that way. Don’t you fucking dare.” His face is inches from mine and his hand’s around my throat. “Don’t you eye my junk and smirk, you whore.”

He’s let go of my wrists, but they’re trapped between us, and the hand that’s jerking my pants down my thighs is fighting the elastic, doggedly, taking my underwear with it.

“You’re just like every other loser whore who thinks there’s not a man on earth who can’t be led around by his dick,” he growls, “Don’t you? Don’t you?” The hand around my throat shakes it, slamming my head back into the mattress.


“Shut the fuck up, you lying piece of shit. You manipulative little cunt.” His grip tightens until I feel the blood thudding against my eardrums. “That’s what you think and I know it. I’ve always known it.”

“No,” I rasp, worming my hands free, clutching at his arm. “That’s not true. Stop it.”

“Don’t even bother, bitch.” He spits the word and his saliva showers my face. “You know what I think?”

Full, flaming panic hits me. I can’t get a proper breath and I can’t think of how to get one. I just claw at his arm, at his wrist, trying to get some air.  And I can feel his other hand between us, working the buttons of his jeans.

“I think the simplest way to get some is just to wait until you black out. Then I don’t have to put up with any more of your poisonous bullshit. What do you think?”

My lungs are burning, my chest heaving and heaving to take in nothing, and just as my vision starts to darken at the edges and I’m positive I’m going to die, he lets go.

“Jesus Christ,” I splutter, wheezing and sobbing. “Jesus fucking Christ, stop it.”

“Aw, come on baby,” he says, tapping my face, then trapping my jaw. “Aren’t you going to show me any love at all? Kiss me like you mean it.”

He presses his mouth against mine. Wet against my closed lips.  He’s gotten his jeans off his hips and down his thighs because his skin is burning hot against mine, legs between mine, spreading them as far as the rucked down track pants will allow.

I can’t let him do this. I squirm sideways, trying to roll, but he’s got almost one hundred pounds on me.  And all I can think is, I can’t let him fuck me like this.  I’m not that person he thinks he’s going to fuck. I can’t let him into me with that vision of me in his head.

Parting my lips, as if I’m going to kiss him back, I catch his bottom lip between my teeth, and I bite down, hard. He jerks back his head, and I feel his lip tear before it slips free.

“Fuck. You bitch.”

His hand is between us, trying to guide his cock into me.  He misses and jabs himself into the crook of my leg. But now I hardly care. I’m screaming in his face and tearing at his hair, clawing at his shoulder. I can taste his blood in my mouth and I just want more.

I’m fighting and yelling and it doesn’t stop until I feel him finally angle his hips and try to thrust into me.

It’s as if all my memory’s edits are gone. In that moment, I remember exactly what it felt like all those years ago. Those first two or three sharp, impossible thrusts when I was sure he was going to rip my cunt to shreds and then, as if my body decides to save me from my own best intentions, it floods itself, opens and he penetrates me.

It hurts, just like it did then, and, just like then, I turn my head to the side and stare at the chest of drawers below the window, then up, out at the sky beyond. The cartoon puffy clouds comic against the bluest of skies.  And I cry.


He felt it, when she gave in. It was like a blind being drawn down.  It leached the adrenalin from his body, and shattered every insane bit of triumph he’d felt the second before. She’d turned her face aside. She was staring into nothing.

He cupped her face and pulled it towards him.  “You fought.”

Face slick with tears, she stared at him. He moved inside her and pressed his lips to her cheek, feeling the salt sting the cut on his lip. It left a bloody smear on her skin.  “You fought damn hard.”

“Did I?” she said vacantly.

“Yeah. Yeah, you did.”

Part of him wanted to stop. To pull out of her and wrap her in his arms because she’d found out what she needed to know, and it was over. But part of him couldn’t bear the thought of not being inside her. The hot, tight liquidity of her.  All the bitterness and contempt was gone, but not the blind hunger to feel her wrapped around his cock.

“Did you mean it?”

“What?” he panted, sliding his arms under her; one across her back and the other at the base of her spine, feeling her hips shift as he hilted himself.

“That I’m manipulative and a whore, all those things. As if you didn’t even know who I was.”

He wasn’t fucking her hard, but it didn’t seem to matter. He was so close to coming he could hardly think in words. “I know who you are, love.”

“Promise?” She slid her arms around his waist, over his lower back, palms flattened over the top of his ass cheeks.

He felt her arch her hips in that way that made it just so much sweeter, so much easier to fill her, and felt her inner muscles close around him. Lowering his head, burying it in the crook of her neck, he promised. And came.


After, he pulls the covers up over us, and lies on his side with me pulled tight against him. I sob and he lets me. Silent the whole time, as if he thinks it’s something I need to purge, and perhaps he’s right.

“Want me to leave you alone for a while?” he offers.

“No. Please. No,” I say, twining my arms through his and anchoring them around me.  He expels a breath so long and deep I think he’s been holding it forever.

“Are you okay?”

“Yeah, I think I am.”

“Will you look at me?”

“Yes, of course,” I say, and roll in his arms to face him. The truth is I’m scared to see any hint of the contempt and disgust I saw in his face earlier, but I meet his eyes, because I’m me, and I have to know. “Are you okay?”

He blinks and then frowns. “I’m not sure.”


“Do you forgive me?”

“Yes.” But perhaps I say it too fast, because he’s still searching my face, still trying to find something – I’m not sure what – in my eyes.  And it’s that searching that makes me think that, at least most of the time, he doesn’t really think those awful things he accused me of. “I forgive you. Do you forgive me?”

“For what?”

“For all this. And for your lip. It looks nasty.”

He runs the tip of his tongue across in and chuckles. “I’ve had worse. Kiss me.”

“Ow, are you sure?”


So I do. Despite all the crying, and the screaming and the fear, it’s that kiss that tells me that everything is going to be okay.

Different, perhaps, but okay.

  73 comments for “On A Very Dry Afternoon in Early Summer

  1. Calvin
    March 15, 2014 at 7:17 pm

    Excellently written RG. Loved the switching back and forth of the POV, helped advance the story without slowing it down. It’s the little details that make it all so vivid.. like the worn patch on the back pocket of his jeans.

    Also, I love how unafraid you are to discuss and in a way un-demonize what is a very real yet taboo topic. We’ve all been in this story, in one role or the other, or sometimes both.

    Excellent work RG, reading your writing inspires your readers to put pen to the paper. Can’t wait to read even more.

  2. March 15, 2014 at 10:28 pm

    Consensual non-consent . . .a tricky topic, beautifully handled. For myself gthis would never work with someone I know, but that’s me 😉

    • March 15, 2014 at 10:37 pm

      It’s probably a terrible comment about me that I never actually believe I know anyone that well. I put that down to my inability to curb my paranoia, and my imagination.

      • Shelby
        May 4, 2015 at 4:46 am

        I don’t know if I liked this or not, I was expecting more violence. It did make me wet though so I guess I liked it a little.
        I have never had a rape fantasy, well, hardly ever. I have never been raped and I like to think I could prevent it but that is really just wishful thinking. Maybe someday I will be. Is that a fantasy?
        This story was well done, a little more charactor building and background and this could have been a novel.

        • May 4, 2015 at 7:53 am

          Thank you.

          Not sure what passes for a novel these days. Probably more plot than this.

  3. forrest franks
    March 16, 2014 at 3:20 am

    Damn, at a loss for words.

  4. forrest franks
    March 16, 2014 at 3:51 am

    Had time to think about the rage and violence it would take to do this to someone. Rape takes the value of that persons self worth,their dignity. It destroys them emotionally. My wife hit me and hurt me once pretty bad, it still happens now and then, but I deal with it. Still get pissed, and retaliate with control just enough to back her down. I see where and why her rage comes from, I am her mate and should listen to her more and pay attention more etc.
    Anyway this on tine I really fucking lost it ,sammed her head into the couch. And started to choke her. I felt like,you fucking little fucking bitch I’m tired of you fucking hitting me you fucking bitch. She was struggling frantically,flailing,tears,fighting for air. I seen the change in her eyes. The feeble helplessness, the destruction of her self esteem,all in one moment. I felt like shit,at the same time she had to know she had to stop hurting me. That I could destroy her at will. I did not like this feeling,knowing the rage and destruction I am capable of. To hurt the one I love. Or anyone I love. I got up and walked away. Later we talked and everything I saw in her eyes at that moment she confirmed to me. Her loss of dignity self worth. I took something from her then. In the same way as a rapist does. You take away a part of the persons soul. I will never go that far again.

  5. Lulu
    March 16, 2014 at 5:32 am

    I haven’t told you in a while how much your writing moves me. This was a wonderful piece. My comment/question, is how did you select the section titles? I am having a difficult time expressing myself, but I somehow heard the protagonist clicking them off in his mind as he went through each step of the plan. The last line acknowledged that something had fundamentally changed between them – it was “different”. And “OK ” isn’t a state of existence that tends to lead to permanence or longevity. That made me wonder what he thought the next heading should be. So if he thought about what happened next, I wondered what word would flash into his head.

    I guess what I am really saying is you did an excellent job of allowing the reader, or at least me, to view the events as they unfurled from inside his head, not from a distance as a casual observer. Maybe you did a little too good of job at it, if I am wondering what he thought of next.

  6. March 16, 2014 at 8:39 am

    OMG….. This is haunting! I was pulled through each sentence as I read with my heart beating so fast. I could feel their emotions, the fever, need and fear. Beautifully written. You are an amazing writer.

    ~ Vista

  7. karen
    March 16, 2014 at 11:25 am

    Gorgeously chilling and well thought-out; the switching between His and Her POVs adds a layer of brutal richness to the story. I can’t explain why, but the ending leaves me with a bittersweet sense of both satisfaction and sadness. As if, now that their hidden fears have been purged, with that, a certain innocence in the relationship has expired, and when they move on, they will be stronger for the shared experience, but perhaps not be together much longer.

    Then again, that’s just my take on it. Amazing work, as always.

    • March 16, 2014 at 2:45 pm

      I found the ending the most challenging part. I didn’t want it to be pat. I wanted it to be a fragile end. Because all real things ARE fragile. I’m more of an optimist than you. Yes, for sure, there is an innocence gone, but I don’t know that innocence is what keeps any real relationship together. i think it’s the opposite. The more you know, the safer you feel.

  8. Madeline Moore
    March 16, 2014 at 11:45 am

    Oh R.G., whatever am I to do with your stories? Continue to be challenged, I suppose. Your work is so beautifully executed and so damn unnerving. Did she get what she thought she needed? Maybe. Did he work out his private fears, did he do what he did purely out of love or was there an edge of truth to his cruelty? I don’t know. Is “different” really going to be okay for them. I hope so. I want to believe it will because I care about these two people. So, is this a good story. Yes.

    • March 16, 2014 at 2:48 pm

      I’m hoping, like all good realistic stories, the answer is … in part. She gets some of what she needs to know. He gets some of his own self-knowledge. But – this is an entirely personal response, not a definitive one – it is the most any two people can hope for. There is a safety in knowing, even if it is not everything, and a profound comfort in knowing that someone else knows you.

      • March 21, 2014 at 4:41 am

        Absolutely. To be accepted by someone who knows everything is the greatest comfort the world has to offer. As with everything, there’s a flip side. Marriage vows say, “to have and to hold, forever and ever, till death do us part.” I’ve been thinking about marriage vows a lot, now that I’m older. If people (and I think they are still mostly young people) were to seriously consider what those vows state, there’d be less marriage and less divorce. But someone in every twosome (barring accidents) does leave. It’s that “death do us part” business. If you lose the one who knew and accepted you, you lose an awful lot. There’s no safety in it. Still, I believe another oldie, “’tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.” It would be awful to be so unacceptable, or so awful, or so guarded, to die without having been known and loved. I think.

        • March 21, 2014 at 8:08 am

          I’ve been thinking about this a lot too. Zizek has a lot to say about the radically ethical act of ‘falling’ in love. Because he says that, with that person, you fall out of the stable order of society. You fall ‘out’ of your roles, out of your loyalties, out of your mind. He has a lot of disdain for the constant exhortation to ‘casualness’ that contemporary consumer society embraces. I think when you are in love, you may appear to be a dutiful member of society, but you aren’t. Posed with a choice, you will always ally yourself absolutely and irrationally with that other person. You will destabilize your identity for them. You will walk away from comfort for them. You will lose your mind when you mourn their passing. You’re not a safe, dependable member of society once you’re in love.

          • julezyme
            August 16, 2014 at 3:27 pm

            Which is why cult leaders and tyrants want so much to control human sexuality.

  9. Six
    March 22, 2014 at 9:47 pm

    A beautifully disturbing story. So dark and yet so illuminating. RG, sometimes I feel as though I’m walking through a forest in the night, following you footsteps, trying to stay close. Your flashlight is our only defense against the creatures that inhabit the night. I loved this story.

  10. garyjayjr@gmail.com
    April 15, 2014 at 12:05 pm

    “I’ve been thinking about this a lot too. Zizek has a lot to say about the radically ethical act of ‘falling’ in love. Because he says that, with that person, you fall out of the stable order of society. You fall ‘out’ of your roles, out of your loyalties, out of your mind. He has a lot of disdain for the constant exhortation to ‘casualness’ that contemporary consumer society embraces. I think when you are in love, you may appear to be a dutiful member of society, but you aren’t. Posed with a choice, you will always ally yourself absolutely and irrationally with that other person. You will destabilize your identity for them. You will walk away from comfort for them. You will lose your mind when you mourn their passing. You’re not a safe, dependable member of society once you’re in love.”

    So damn true, every single point you made.

    Not many understand the depths of love as that comment expresses. The deepest, truest love, (few ever experience it in human history), will create an entirely different “universe” within a persons existence, everything in their mental and emotional existence will shift, bend and change form– leaving them shattered and reborn again in a continuous stream of longing and desire. In many respects, Love– is the full circle of all life itself. It is birth and death, fear and fearlessness– joy and pain. And love awakens you to “truth”, and cultivates authenticity of emotion and perspective. And when a human being “wakes”, that person begins to understand, that consumerism is an artificial form of existence, that the grind of conformity to get the approval of others in their desire to have love– is a hoax, a farce, a lie.

    In short, the ego suffocates and oppresses real connection with life, and love can liberate you from that “identity”, “the imagined self”, and help you get in touch with all life around you. It fosters the ability to tap into the most fundamental and primal part of oneself– the animal and life force that we are; it’s the truly authentic derived from the universe itself (life as it is); not an artifice derived from the “imagined” self.

    Love makes you feel alive. And strangely enough, Love– is simply a shift and change in the cocktails of chemicals that our physical brain creates. Yet those chemicals when changed in how they behave– creates an entirely different feeling and perspective of the “world” that we “live in.”

    • April 15, 2014 at 7:37 pm

      “the ego suffocates and oppresses real connection with life”

      Especially the ego as we are expected to develop it currently. Amen.

      • garyjayjr@gmail.com
        April 16, 2014 at 6:41 am

        Also- Love– is liberating; but also a motherfucker…

  11. M
    April 21, 2014 at 7:52 am

    Much thought ….

  12. Mimi
    June 1, 2014 at 5:52 pm

    An incredibly amazing story.

  13. Emari
    June 14, 2014 at 9:55 am

    I love your works, the variety of ways you explore sexuality and intimacy. I was intrigued by the way the actions of rape were transformed into an expression of love and trust. Brilliant.

  14. earl
    June 21, 2014 at 8:20 pm

    It was a work of art.the love the two people had for each other to go through that together is very moving.and it brought me to tears and anyone who knows me knows I don’t cry.to have that much faith in one person and make you’re self that vulnerable.even thow it’s just a story it speeks to human character.well done.

    • anastaria
      June 28, 2014 at 5:04 pm

      I know it was fantastically done wasn’t it? I really want this writer to email me, i would love to talk to her.

  15. DCK
    June 25, 2014 at 3:57 am

    “Once terror locked me, turned me into an absence. Like Lot’s Wife, into a pillar of salt.”

    This is such a succinct and painfully accurate description of a feeling I’ve felt every day for a long time now… You have a way of getting inside a feeling and spreading it wide open. Long time reading, first time commenting. Keep pushing and stretching your gift to endless limits.

  16. taylor
    June 26, 2014 at 9:24 am

    Really well written and far, very far from traditional erotic fiction. This is the first time I’m come across your site.
    I like the quiet reference to the partners uncomfortable past. Having had some unusual experiences myself I understand that they can often lead to a broader sexual imagination.
    Truly original and a wonderful insight to the mindset of the characters. More psychology than eroticism.
    Again, different from the traditional – didn’t exactly turn me on, but I found it thought provoking and moreish

  17. Anastaria
    June 28, 2014 at 5:02 pm

    You created that wonderfully! I’ve always had a rape fantasy, I’ve never been raped. I have never been able to bring it up because if I do it isn’t rape, that paradox hates me. But I think that I could really enjoy it, though this also brought it more to light for me. Like I know now what I would be asking for if I did. My husband’s and I’s sexual relationship has had some problems, and I feel like if he read this and then did it, it could help him out immensely, but I just dont know how to get that started! terrific short though, truly enjoyed it. You should do one about stranger rape, but you may have already, this is the first ive read of you, but i will be going back to read another. Hopefully u can be my erotica entertainment, I dont know where to find it except for ordering it online and I cant afford it but it is entirely what I want. Thanks for making this free for all

  18. Susan
    July 2, 2014 at 8:09 am

    Compelling writing. Loved it immensely. Very well done, RG.
    That private little world in our heads that most of us never get to (or want to) explore properly. Taboo. But why?
    I connected with the female to a degree. I was raped in my teens. I didn’t fight back. Why? I’m still figuring that out. This story filled in some blanks. Fiction or not, it was nice to read others have the same dilemma. I’m not guilty of anything but self preservation.

  19. Elle
    July 8, 2014 at 11:16 pm

    A man raped me. So I would not normally read about rape in the context of erotica. Having said that, I must say that having read several of your works, I felt certain that the perception and insight with which you write would put this issue in an alternate and meaningful context.

    Incredibly compelling and poignant manner of addressing this subject. Both characters questioned their own capabilities, limits and boundaries as well as their trust in each other. He was unsure at what level of his own cruelty would he be able to say to himself, “enough” and stop. Or could he stop? She was markedly concerned to the point of distress, as to whether she could or would fight to defend herself.

    You allowed them the freedom to explore their shadow issues which they have attempted to deny, cover over and conceal even from themselves. in such a way as to also allow them to grow individually and together as a couple. There are always thing we do not know about those in our lives no matter the length of our association. This is true of this couple, as well, but in the end is the sense that that really is OKAY given the depth and now newly discovered facets of the trust between them. Brilliant!

    • July 9, 2014 at 5:06 am

      I’m really glad to hear that this story, though perhaps difficult, was okay for you. It’s why I put the warning at the top.

      I think what is incredibly valuable about fiction is that it is a place in which to mentally examine different ways of looking at things, addressing problematic issues without leaving scars. It allows us to burrow down into the meat of a disturbing issue and try to make sense of what exactly makes real experiences so traumatic and, perhaps, to ring-fence them and understand where fear really lives.

      Rape is an interesting issue. It is so heavy with historic and semiotic meaning. Although I am very glad that our society has evolved to the point where rape is condemned and where we are concerned to place blame where it truly belongs, I am disturbed by the lack of willingness to examine what it is exactly that rape takes away from us. I think it is different for each person. For some it is the sheer shock of the physical act. For others, it is the violence. For others, the depersonalization. There is no one experience of rape, because each person is an individual and what they have taken from them is often unique to them.

      I could only write this story via my idiosyncratic experience. When I thought about what, after the event, left the wound for me, it was my fear that I could not trust myself to make the effort to fight. That fear would always paralyze me. That my reactions were unnatural and somehow spoke to a lack of value I had for my own survival. So, for me, this was the story I wanted to write. And the examination I wanted to make. I’m sure it does not address the issues many others might have, but I cannot do that. We are all unique. And we process our experiences in highly individualized ways.

      So I did not expect this story would address someone else’s issues. The most I could hope for was that it might encourage them to stop being overwhelmed by the concept of rape as a unclimbable mountain and perhaps to consider attempting to break it down into smaller chunks, leave the social and cultural generalizations behind and maybe identify their own particular darkness in the experience. To know something is to have power over it.

  20. Ivy D.
    August 2, 2014 at 10:36 am

    This is by far the most literate erotica I have found. No small praise: I am a hard-ass when it comes to usage, not in the sense of criticizing or correcting people, only in the sense that no matter how good the story, it’s painful for me to read terrible writing and a story might be the hottest thing ever but if the writing is terrible I won’t be able to get through.

    I need to read stuff that women aren’t supposed to want to read 😉 let alone NEED to, and there is such a small pool of it that I have to make myself overlook painfully bad writing; if I find something even close to what I need with writing that is merely mediocre, and it doesn’t have TOO many egregious grammatical errors, it feels like a triumph, like a great find. In other words, you are really good at this. I could look at your “about” page but I’d rather talk to you because you have GOT to be awesome…I want to write erotica (Well, I do write it but don’t finish it, let alone post/publish) because I write well and have some very weird/non-cliché ideas that I think there is an audience for (hey, I can’t be the only one who wants to read a particular thing, right? That would be rather arrogant in a way!) but I am curious about the best approach/forum for publicizing very literary while simultaneously very “wrong” (I don’t think it’s wrong, it’s just not the sort of thing that would go over very well with the mainstream erotica reader and can’t think of a better word at this hour) stories?

    It’s very late where i am and I am not sure this is very coherent, but if you can find an answerable question in all that jabber and it’s mildly interesting and you are bored enough, I would love to hear from you. Because you.are.a.rock.star.


  21. jem dreamz
    August 14, 2014 at 12:30 am


  22. crish
    August 18, 2014 at 2:56 pm

    Amazing to me that such a subject can be made so realistic; and so tenderly handled.
    Your writing impresses me greatly. Thank you for letting me read it.

  23. Jurden
    August 24, 2014 at 12:14 am

    I was directed to your site by a comment on an erotic subreddit, so I arrived here with an expectation that was drastically different from what I found in this story. As per usual for me, I scrolled down a little to see what the actual story content and writing were like, and was instantly interested by the theme of testing what’s true about oneself. I can relate to that obsessive-compulsive need to know who I really am and what my limits really are – how I’d react in this situation or that. I connected almost instantly with both characters.

    I’ve also wondered about how dark my fantasies and real actions could go, and have explored that a little bit in some writing partnerships. Fortunately, what I discovered was that I really wasn’t comfortable with causing suffering – even if the ideas of some kinds of nonconsent were hot to me in the abstract. Figuring that out about myself was a relief.

    It was even more of a relief, though, for me to read this story. Several times, I wasn’t sure if I could keep reading, because I anticipated having too negative of a reaction – really deeply not wanting to imagine what I thought was coming. My obsessiveness compelled me to keep going. What I found was that I flinched and turned away from every expression of anger and violence (which I more-or-less expected), and – more importantly – felt like throwing up as I imagined what was happening once it started: How they felt. What it was like to be in their heads, having those thoughts. What was happening to their relationship, how they viewed each other, the lack of trust, and the sense of violation.

    Most importantly, I felt like throwing up when reading the after-care scene – and the last line (about things being different).

    For me, this story purged my own uncertainty about where my mind is at, who I am, and who I could become. Even if some gray shades of nonconsent arouse me in fantasies that involve, as you put it so well, characters that are just “shells” of fictional people, I can now feel secure in the knowledge that I’m not turned on by anything related to things that are realistic or dark. Whatever attracts me to those nonconsensual abstracts that I don’t understand, I know that it isn’t any desire to see someone in pain. And I also know that it isn’t a desire to unleash anger, exert power, or wield control over someone. Those explanations are so common that I had wondered if they somehow applied to me, and I just couldn’t recognize it. Now, I’m convinced that they aren’t relevant – though I’m not yet sure what the correct explanations are.

    The skill you have with words is amazing, by the way. This was the most well-written story I’ve ever seen. I don’t read many books, so take that statement with however much salt you think is appropriate. But, still; Well done.

    • August 24, 2014 at 12:33 am

      This is one of the amazing things about writing and fiction: you can deeply explore things and find out how you feel about them without having to do them in real life. Reading should be an adventure. Some adventures are scary.

  24. Philippa
    August 24, 2014 at 9:15 am

    I found it amazingly written and poses a brilliant few questions. How many people actually fantasize about rape? I’ve been in a similar situation as the woman as in I’ve been raped and didn’t fight and now I’ wondering will I fight if it happens again… A brilliant story.

  25. lou
    August 30, 2014 at 11:39 am

    All i can say is i wanted to finish reading this story and as i did i cried.

  26. Uli
    August 30, 2014 at 7:49 pm

    It’s amazing that you can tell both the male and female side of the story so well. Which means maybe there’s not too much difference in the way we feel. I have never experienced rape nor have I attempted it, but I have often thought about it and found the thought quite exciting–and then thought well, I shouldn’t think like that! In the end though I cannot reconcile sex with violence. In the sex act, that is. You’re story has made me think though: there must be many other ways of raping a person other than in sex. Your work is very thought provoking. Thanks.

  27. Lily
    September 13, 2014 at 5:41 pm

    That is one the most beautiful piece I have read. Truly, it is so deep that I am at a loss of words.

  28. Ms. Niles
    September 16, 2014 at 7:42 pm

    We’ll i do want you to keep up the stories . That being said this was one I need to think on.

  29. Beatice
    September 28, 2014 at 5:39 am

    I just have one 1 Qu.
    Why write about rape?
    Is it meant to be a journey about getting
    Over rape or is is surpost to be erotic?

    • September 28, 2014 at 3:32 pm

      Beatice, why write about anything? Because it is interesting. Because the more traumatic the human experience, the more complex our reactions.

      You ask the question “Is it meant to be a journey about getting over rape or is is surpost to be erotic?

      I don’t want to be disingenuous with my answer, or tricky or overly intellectual, but it’s hard to give you an absolute answer because it is the reader who makes the meaning of any given story. What I am completely sure of is that it is probably about completely different things for different readers. What I meant is not all that important. I don’t think a writer has the right to say what a story means for everyone.

      But, I guess you are asking what I meant it to be when I wrote it, yes? (and I repeat, again, that that doesn’t mean that this is the definitive ‘meaning’ of the story)

      For me it was about trying to unravel that thread between getting over rape, how rape affects who you think you are and how, when you’ve been raped, it becomes hard to untangle all sexual experiences from that one experience of that one, non-consensual event.

      So, in a way, for me, it is both. At the moment, that is not a very politically correct or feminist stance. But I’m a writer, not an activist or a politician. I’m interested in complexity, not in finding a ‘right answer’ or providing a guide for ‘correct thinking’.

      I always provide trigger warnings on stories like this, and I believe that readers are intelligent and will consider whether or not they wish to go on and read a story after I have posted the warning. It appears you chose to.

      A more interesting question is… how did the story strike you?

  30. Valarie
    November 28, 2014 at 1:38 pm

    Just Wow.

    I have been reading alot of fanfiction lately and had decided to write my own piece of literature. One of the stories i wanted to write included smut, so wanting to write it in away to entice my readers i decided to look up and find tips about writing smut. One of the websites i read encourged me to read erotica as sort of a reference. So i did, i had found this website. I wanted to write something intense so i thought reading something rough like rape would do.

    Truth be told i wasn’t expecting much. I had expected it to be like any other book or story i had ever read but, it showed me a new creative way to write. And i appreciate that.

    The story was brilliantly written, i enjoyed it very much. I will continue to read and respond to your stories

  31. Mal
    January 13, 2015 at 2:49 am

    This left me trembling. The thought process was so perfect, and terrifying..Truly disturbing in the best ways. Just makes you realize how much you actually keep hidden from your partner, the person who’s supposed to know everything about you- and often the ones we keep ourselves most hidden for that reason. The depth here, I don’t know if a relationship could come back from this place, but this proves it exists. I don’t know why antimatter comes to mind. We’ll done.

  32. Michael
    January 27, 2015 at 8:17 pm

    Absolutely masterly handling of an enormously fraught topic. I didn’t find it arousing on this reading because it is so dense and affecting emotionally/intellectually. Extremely vivid writing too. And well done on ventriloquising the male perspective, done with a great deal of understanding and empathy. Thank you.

    • January 27, 2015 at 9:30 pm

      Um. Thank you. Although I think your verb ‘ventriloquize’ is an interesting one. I never feel like that’s what I’m doing when I write a character of another gender, but if that is how it felt to you, I have some more work to do!.

      • Michael
        January 27, 2015 at 11:10 pm

        None of that was meant pejoratively and I’m sorry if you found it patronising. I should have said unequivocally it was the best writing I have yet read on this subject from a writer of either (or any) gender.

        • January 27, 2015 at 11:12 pm

          I didn’t find it patronizing at all! I thought it was constructive criticism. If the male narrative sounds unreal, I definitely want to know it does!.

  33. monica
    February 10, 2015 at 3:47 am

    I absolutely love the way you write. keep up the good work. I would definitely read your book if you ever made one.

  34. danishcoolish
    February 20, 2015 at 7:25 pm

    In a way I almost hate your stories. This one in particular. I love how honest your writing is. I would compare it to a sketch drawing rather than a cartoon, where you write as it is not how people think it is.
    However Its like being shown half a puzzle. I feel both frustrated there isn’t more and that you have written too much.
    I read it a second time just to pick up anything i missed. sort of like I am not smart enough to pick out and understand every sentences`s true meaning.
    Its like a too sweet chocolate cake. Like its only half finished yet to add more would detract from it. I don’t know really how to enplane how it makes me feel. frustrated? ensnared? Its beautiful too.

    • February 20, 2015 at 10:39 pm

      Well, it certainly seems that the story has made you uncomfortable and given you food for thought. So I’m satisfied that my work is done! Thanks for taking the time to leave a comment.

  35. Trantilar
    March 17, 2015 at 3:58 pm

    Thank you for this story. Echoing many other comments that it was beautifully written, with the switches in point of view very effective!

    As I was reading I found myself cringing at how his unexpected anger and insults felt to her, and wondering if they were almost more of a violation than the consensual non-consensual act. Then when he kept going after he could tell she had given in, that was when I wished he would stop. As a female reader who has not been raped I’m aware that my perspective is more in my imagination than in my body’s memories, but it was that moment that I felt like it went from consensual to non-consensual… Even though she had consented up front! But as I read on, it seemed as though that was also the point in which it moved to a more gentle experience… One that both maybe needed? It certainly ended differently and much more lovingly than her experience as a teen did. Lots to think about.

    And I too loved the last line.

    Thank you for your writing!

    • March 21, 2015 at 9:25 am

      “As a female reader who has not been raped I’m aware that my perspective is more in my imagination than in my body’s memories”

      I think it is always a mistake to insist that fiction be a faithful representation of reality – especially in issues like this.

  36. March 19, 2015 at 11:08 pm

    These gon’ be some of my all-time favorite lines. “But part of him couldn’t bear the thought of not being inside her. The hot, tight liquidity of her. All the bitterness and contempt was gone, but not the blind hunger to feel her wrapped around his cock.”

  37. Livia Feneche
    April 13, 2015 at 1:02 am

    Oh God, I can’t believe I’ve found such good work online. I’ve just begun writing erotica myself, but as perfectionist as I am, I struggle to find the truth and substance within my charachters and my stories. I’ve read a lot of stuff out there. And structurally there’s nothing really wrong with them. But most of them fail to engage the reader as a participant of the story, rather than simply being an observer.

    This is the first story I’ve read from your website and I felt deeply involved with it. I jave never been raped, but the way you threaded the story made me totally relate to the feeling of the main characher, as well as of her lover. It felt really real, and it awed me completely. I just couldn’t stop reading from the relatively tiny screen of my phone.

    It was touching, moving, real, exciting, sexy, raw, deep and so much more. Congratulations! I think I’ve just become a customary reader of your art. Keep up the outstanding job. I hope one day I get to be nearly as good as you are!

  38. Sabrina Green
    May 5, 2015 at 5:35 am

    Amazing you have a really nice talent fir writing.

  39. Laahad
    June 15, 2015 at 7:18 am

    I was scared of reading this at first, but you wrote it in such a graceful, simple way, that it made me as a reader appreciate the psychology, the mental, the feelings and the roles they were playing, the transformation, the relationship, all these more than enjoying the actual sexual act. Thank you, you’re talented and don’t let anyone tell you otherwise!

  40. Devourer of Words
    June 17, 2015 at 12:01 pm

    I almost didn’t want to read this one, a common sentiment I’m sure. Yet I am so glad I did, as I find my palate uncommonly satiated after only this one reading. This is not a story that I would consider delicious, more… fulfilling, similar to the feeling of gorging oneself on tender, flame-seared fillet mignon. Feeling the blood and juices slide down ones throat and into the belly, satisfying a deep hunger for the life-force of another animal. That was how I felt after reading this. My thanks, dear Author.

  41. April
    July 3, 2015 at 3:47 am

    This story is a raw and insightful exploration of the paradox of consensual non-consent. I love the interplay, the dance between both characters and the changing POV. Their conversation unfolds in fits and starts, very much like these conversations do in real life. The question that the male character asks, “How are we going to find our way back from that?” resonated with me. Just as these characters went to the edge, took the risk, and jumped off, I felt that you did the same as a writer. I felt the ending was hopeful. That this was ultimately an act of sexual healing for both of them.

    This story played out very cinematically in my head. It would make a brilliant short film.

  42. April
    July 3, 2015 at 7:14 am

    Freezing and not fighting back is a brain-based response to danger:


  43. Seldom
    July 11, 2015 at 7:23 am

    I have long held the view that rape is assault. The notion of sexual assault to me has the tendency to blame the victim. At best I guess it may be viewed as a subset of assault. As with any assault or for that matter any action toward one that is unwanted we are inescapably left with feelings of ‘what could I have done differently?’, ‘ how could I respond if it happened again?’. Your story is fascinating and disturbing in where it takes me and in the end after the fight she just relinquished. Does the relinquishment come from exhaustion, being overwhelmed by the physically superior foe, playing possum as a suvival response? Is there a way a victim of assault can physically acquiesce but mentally seperate the physical act from their essence – ‘you may hurt my body but you can not hurt me – my essence’? These are questions that I’m left to explore. not sure if I should thank you or curse (in the nicest possible way) you… Thank you for sharing your writing.

    • July 11, 2015 at 7:53 am

      Thanks for the comment on this. It is a difficult piece. I really did want to explore the problem with some of the prevalent social narratives about rape – especially as they play out in situations where there is prosecution: i.e. if you didn’t fight, it wasn’t rape. I think a lot of women freeze, and then this sense that they should have fought is internalized, and haunts them.

      There’s no ‘should have’ when it comes to – as you say – assault. We tend to do what we think is going to keep us alive the longest.

      I wanted to confront the incredibly complex, mixed, irrational and often very long-term response.

  44. July 26, 2015 at 11:41 am

    I’ve been a fan for years, so I’m sorry for not commenting sooner. This story is exquisite. Your use of language causes me physical pain in the best way. There’s a complex emotional truth here. Tender and ugly. Thank you for telling it.

  45. August 3, 2015 at 1:21 am

    I, too, echo the prevailing sentiment expressed by the previous commenters—the writing is powerful, I was reluctant to read it, I thought it was a fascinating exploration of “consensual non-consent”, but, honestly— it didn’t turn me on. Now I don’t know how much of that might be due to an unwillingness on my part to allow myself to think that violence could be sexy. But you have written a very powerful and thought-provoking story, Remittance Girl! Thank you for writing and sharing this with us!

  46. Nube 9
    August 16, 2015 at 4:41 pm

    Excellent writing skills! I have been sifting through erotica stories over the past several months and, as was commented on earlier, I have found the vast majority to be lacking in one way or another. Most are written by people who would have failed 6th grade English classes back when I took them. The few I have found with grammatical skills lack any storytelling ability and/or are simply cliche. Your work rises to the top and makes the reading less of a process. When the writing is done well, I can become engrossed in the story and worry l essential about what the heck did she mean to say hear. Very refreshing.

    I find two things very interesting about the comments following this story (other than the fact that I just read 17 months worth of comments ). First is the number of readers who have chosen this as the 1st on your site to read. I myself have done the same. As I mentioned, I have not found much in the erotica genre the has not been written about ad naseum. When I saw rape in the description, I thought this might be interesting. I was not disappointed in the slightest. The story was thought provoking, graphic and even a little stimulating. I’m not certain I would classify it as erotica, but that’s okay, too. I do agree that it would make an excellent story for a short film, maybe even a feature. I doubt you would ever see an Oscar nomination; not boring enough.

    The 2nd interesting thing is how many readers are just beginning (or considering) writing erotica. I followed a link to your sight from a search I did, looking for a place to post some stories I plan to write. I have an idea for a series of erotica tales (which I hope do not become as cliche as those I have descibed). I was kind of seeking a site that i could post my works, one or two at a time, and get some feedback Here i have found a whole website created by one author for that very purpose. I will absolutely be reading more of your work and taking inspiration from it. Enjoyed.

    • August 18, 2015 at 8:25 pm

      Good luck with your writing! Be brave. Write from the heart.

  47. Aiden
    September 11, 2015 at 1:25 pm

    Still processing all that this brought up for me including my own rape experience and loss of virginity at 14. I’ll likely comment further once I can put the words down. But it leaves me introspective on my need to push my own fears and how I physically react to that in my sexual activities.

    Thank you for not being afraid to write the way you do!

  48. Tankgirl
    October 1, 2015 at 1:27 pm

    This was…. this was simply amazing. You’ve explained so much of what I’ve been thinking my whole life and the ways in which you use words to explain those emotions is breathtaking. This is, truly, a masterpiece. Simply amazing! I can’t say it enough!

  49. Hamza9575
    October 20, 2015 at 1:57 pm

    I am a dominant and a mathematician, so i know how to keep a handle on myself. But i had to stop reading twice to get myself away from my own madness. I need to have more control on myself. Thank you for a clear no hold barred story. Disclaimer was a good idea.

  50. Becky
    November 19, 2015 at 9:23 am

    Great story. Not what I was expecting, better!

    The beauty of this is in the relationship. That level of trust pulls you into the story.


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